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 <h1>XVM &mdash; Virtual Servers for MIT </h1>
 
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 <h1>XVM &mdash; Virtual Servers for MIT </h1>
 

-<p><strong>xvm.mit.edu</strong> is a virtualization service for the
-MIT community.  We offer <strong>virtual machines</strong>&mdash;your
-own complete system on which you can start from our <strong>two-minute
-Debian</strong> Linux auto-install or install the operating
-<strong>system of your choice</strong>.  The service is <strong>free
-to any Athena account holder</strong>.  </p>
-
-<p>If you're a member of the MIT community, go <a
-href="https://xvm.mit.edu/"><strong>try out the service</strong>
-now</a>.  You'll need an <a href="http://ca.mit.edu/">MIT personal
+<p><strong>xvm.mit.edu</strong> is a virtualization service for the MIT
+community.  We offer <strong>virtual machines</strong>&mdash;your own
+complete system on which you can start from our <strong>two-minute
+Debian install</strong> or install the <strong>operating system of your
+choice</strong>.  The service is <strong>free</strong> to any Athena
+account holder.</p>
+
+<p>MIT users:</p>
+<blockquote><big><a
+href="https://xvm.mit.edu/"><strong><font color="green">&rarr;</font> Log in to XVM now</strong>
+</a></big></blockquote>
+<p>You'll need an <a href="http://ca.mit.edu/">MIT personal

 certificate</a>.</p>
 
 certificate</a>.</p>
 

-<p>The XVM code base is also forthcoming as a <strong>free
-software</strong> project.  We've been too lazy to put in a COPYING
-file yet, but you can look at our source in <a
-href="https://xvm.mit.edu:1111/">our Subversion repo</a>.  If you're
-interested in using <strong>XVM outside MIT</strong>, we'd be happy to
-help you make it work in your environment; mail us at
-<tt>xvm@mit.edu</tt>.</p>
+<h2>XVM features:</h2>
+<ul>
+<li>Online management of virtual machines</li>
+<li>A wide selection of bootable CD-ROM images and installers</li>
+<li>A two-minute Debian (Etch) image cloner</li>
+<li>Secure VNC console access via a Java applet</li>
+<li>Secure serial console access over SSH</li>
+<li>Ownership and access control through Athena lockers and groups</li>
+</ul>
+
+<p>The XVM code base is a <strong>free software</strong> project under
+development, licensed under GPLv2+. If you're interested in using it,
+we'd be happy to help you set it up in your environment. Our Subversion
+repository is</p> <blockquote><a
+href="https://xvm.mit.edu:1111/">https://xvm.mit.edu:1111/</a></blockquote>

 
 <p>xvm.mit.edu is provided by <a href="http://sipb.mit.edu/">SIPB</a>,
 
 <p>xvm.mit.edu is provided by <a href="http://sipb.mit.edu/">SIPB</a>,

-the <strong>student computing group</strong> at MIT, with generous
-funding from <a href="http://web.mit.edu/ist/">IS&amp;T</a>.  Like all
-SIPB projects, we are independently run by our own team of volunteers,
-and we welcome new contributors.</p>
+the student computing group at MIT, with generous funding from <a
+href="http://web.mit.edu/ist/">IS&amp;T</a>.  Like all SIPB projects, we
+are independently run by our own team of volunteers, and we welcome new
+contributors.</p>

 
 

-<p>Questions and <strong>feedback welcome</strong> at <tt>xvm@mit.edu</tt>.</p>
+<p>Questions and feedback welcome at <a
+href="mailto:xvm@mit.edu">xvm@mit.edu</a>.</p>

 
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